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原文论文改N次发表于:2007/6/22 20:52:00

月底就拿证了,但今天还被通知要改论文

说是英文摘要有语法错误,但凭我的四级水平实在只能写成这样= =

求英语高手JMS帮忙看下面的英文有啥语法错误,拜托了,鞠躬~!

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中文

随着中国经济的不断发展,物流需求也快速增长。港口是承担社会物流的主要场所,特别是进出口物流的主要载体。港口物流能够带动港口经济,进而带动区域经济、全国经济。因此它在国民经济发展中发挥着越来越重要的作用。目前,国际上许多大型港口都向现代化物流港口发展。与国际大型港口发展相比,我国港口的物流发展显得比较落后。作为我国华南地区大型港口代表,广州港必须通过现代港口物流化的改革,达到可持续发展。正因如此,广州便计划以广州港为主体,打造我国南方国际现代物流中心。

本文描述广州港物流状况,利用SWOT分析方法,从优势、劣势、机遇和威胁四方面进行分析,总结出广州港目前物流发展水平与其他港口的差距,并提出改善对策。从而在解决广州港存在的问题,促进其发展的同时,能够为其他港口的现代物流化发展提供一定的参考。

英文

With the economic development in China, the logistics need is also increasing rapidly. Ports are the main places for social logistics, especially the main carrier for import and export logistics. Port Logistics can assist the port’s economy, even assist the regional economy and the national economy. So it is playing a more and more important role in the development of the national economy in China. At present, many major ports in the world are becoming to be the modern logistic ports. Compare with the international major port development, the development of port in China is backward relatively. As the representation of the major ports in South China, Guangzhou Port must achieve the sustainable development by the revolution of the modern port logistics. Therefore, Guangzhou government plans to make Guangzhou Port to be the corpus, and create the modern International logistics center in South China.

This article describe the condition of Guangzhou Port logistics. By using the SWOT method, assay the strength, weakness, opportunity, treat. Then summarize the logistics development level disparity between Guangzhou Port and other ports, and refer improvement. So that it can solve the problem in the Guangzhou Port, and promote the development. At the same time, it can provide a reference to other ports for the development of modern logistics.


1呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:24:00

With the  development of economic  in China,the need of  logistics is also increasing rapidly.

2呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:26:00

 especially the main carrier for import and export logistics..改为especially  for import and export logistics..

3论文改N次发表于:2007/6/22 21:30:00

终于有人回复了,感动~~

LS请继续


4呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:32:00

Port Logistics can 这个单词是加速吧?不是助手吧? the port’s economy, even assist(不该用这个词语) the regional economy and the national economy. Therefore it is playing  more important role in the development of the national economy in China.你能否写的简练写??


5呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:35:00

In nowadays, many major ports  have become to  modern logistic ports in the worldwirth.

6我也来发表于:2007/6/22 21:36:00

Port Logistics can push the port economy(不太确定economy能否用于port), or even push the regional economy and the national economy. It is playing a more and more important role in China's economy .

7论文改N次发表于:2007/6/22 21:36:00

要表达“促进”的意思用哪个词比较好?

8呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:38:00

Compare with the developing speed of international major port  in the world,it is backward relatively in China. 

我越来越钦佩您是怎么过的四级考试的了!! 


9呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:41:00

你把促进改成ACCELERATE


10呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:45:00

This article describe the condition of Guangzhou Port logistics. 改为this issue shows thatthe condition of Guangzhou Port logistics.

11呵呵发表于:2007/6/22 21:47:00

真枉费我那些作文课了。。。。。。

唉唉唉。。。


12论文改N次发表于:2007/6/22 21:48:00

俺的四级是两年前低空过的,掩面逃~~~

13==发表于:2007/6/22 21:49:00

俺的四级是两年前低空过的,掩面逃~~~
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难道这些年,四级变简单了??????

14==发表于:2007/6/22 21:52:00

我建议你,先把中文的摘要写的简练写!第一节简直没说什么~

谁会看这么长的摘要啊????

你把摘要的中文先缩短到以前的60%。

尤其是第一部分。

找出你的KEY WORDS。重新写你的摘要吧。。

尤其第一节,基本一半以上都是废话。


15==发表于:2007/6/22 21:52:00

我建议你,先把中文的摘要写的简练写!第一节简直没说什么~

谁会看这么长的摘要啊????

你把摘要的中文先缩短到以前的60%。

尤其是第一部分。

找出你的KEY WORDS。重新写你的摘要吧。。

尤其第一节,基本一半以上都是废话。


16==发表于:2007/6/22 21:54:00

把所有的PUSH 换成ACCELERATE..

然后主语尽量用IT,别老用那么长的主语。且,我认为你不会用主语从句来表达你想说的意思。

如果主语从句用不好,请用被动语态,这样句子简单的多


17爬爬发表于:2007/6/22 21:56:00

TO LS:不是俺想写废话,是学校要求这字数= =

为了迎评估我们已经为了格式改了很多次


18==发表于:2007/6/22 21:57:00

TO LS:不是俺想写废话,是学校要求这字数= =

为了迎评估我们已经为了格式改了很多次

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说句实在话。其实没什么大的语法错误。。

感觉纯粹为了凑字数。。这个东西老师要是看的不仔细,就这么交了吧。。


19论文改N次发表于:2007/6/22 21:58:00

忘了换MJ,LS是我


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